Is this story i made good?

Ive read some of your work before and as aleays its really crisp with a great sense of impending doom. The description of his outfit was a bit too lenghty yet other than that very good job babe. I'd love to read more.I think he is going to reveal some device he has or some object that will affect people. I think he will be helpless to control and will have to enlist the help of someone . particularly a woman.